leah1234 Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 Do you know if there's going to be an update tonight???? This probably contradicts my previous post even though i loved the last update i've been thinking about it and i sort of want all loose ends to be tied up before/if aden and belle become permanent!!! I love the style of language you write in- i think i would call it a combination of collaquial and descriptive and i loke your use of stichomythia i feel like it varies your updates (i've had to brush on my english terms lately i've got my mock exams start on monday i've now got 10 subjects and about 5 nights to revise 3 years work) update soon xxxxxxx
Louise_2983 Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 Chapter 17 “What hurts most, was being so close, having so much to say, And watching you walk away...” She rested her head against his chest as her rapid breathing gradually returned to normal. Her slender arm looped lazily around his waist as she basked in the warm afterglow. “That was...” she murmured. “A mistake” he interrupted quietly as her head instantly shot up to look at him. “What? Aden... no... don’t you dare freak out on me!” He pushed her arm away from him and sat up, his elbows resting on his knees as he perched on the edge of her bed, his head in his hands. “I’m not freaking out” he told her calmly as the light reflected off the gold ring on the third finger of his left hand. “That wasn’t a mistake” she whispered biting back the tears threatening to escape as she sat up and pulled the duvet up around her in a sudden fit of modesty. “How could you say that?” “I’m married” he stated bluntly, his head still bowed and resting against his palms. “That doesn’t mean that what just happened between us wasn’t....” “Wasn’t what?” he questioned with a glare as he finally raised his head and twisted it to look at her, his golden hair tousled from their previous activity. “The best I’ve felt in almost 5 years! The closest I’ve been to anyone since...well since the last time I was with you” “Because you’ve kept yourself so pure and virginal ever since then haven’t you?” he laughed softy. “Don’t Aden! Don’t you dare turn this into an argument about how much of a skank I am! So I’ve slept with other people but that was all it was! I love you and nothing I’ve felt since we’ve been apart has ever come close to how I feel when I’m with you” “How do you feel?” “You know how I feel because you feel it too I know you do” she whispered. “I don’t know how I feel” he confessed, his eyelids closings in frustration. “Then I’ll tell you. You feel like you’ve finally found a big piece of you that’s been missing for almost as long as you can bear to remember. You feel like you’re going to explode because what we have is so intense, you feel safe and wanted and lov-“ “Stop it!” he snapped jumping up and retrieving his jeans from where they lay crumpled in a heap on the floor. Before she could blink he was pulling them on and fastening his belt. “Don’t do this Aden” she pleaded, her eyes wide and longing. “I’m married Belle” “Oh really?!” she replied feigning shock. “I forgot, you really don’t remind me often enough” “What do you want me to do?!” he cried in frustration. “Carry on with you behind Kirsty’s back? Sneak out every night and leave our son?” “No of course not! Do you really think I like this? Being the other woman?! I don’t want to be your mistress Aden, I want to be the only one!” “I’m married” he told her for the third time, subconsciously twirling the gold band around his finger. “Will you stop saying that!” “It’s the truth, nothing we say is going to change that Belle!” he sighed. “You’re wrong. How about, oh I don’t know “Kirsty, I want a divorce”, that might just about do it!” “She doesn’t deserve this, I’m not going to hurt her Belle” “And what about me Aden? What about how much this is hurting me?” He expression softened slightly as he gazed at her. “I just can’t be that selfish” he told her before walking out of the room. In an instant she was on her feet, grabbing the flimsy silk robe she wasn’t even sure why she owned and pulling it around her before dashing into the lounge where she found him retrieving his shirt. “And how was this not selfish Aden? Barging round here and sweet talking your way into my bed. Telling me how much you’ve missed me, how much you love me! When all you ever intended to do was use me and then walk away!” “You know that’s not true” he told her gently, his expression conveying just how sharply her words had cut into him. “That’s not how it seems, how it feels” “You know I meant every word, every touch, every kiss” he murmured. “Then be selfish Aden! Stop thinking about everyone else and do what you want for a change!” “That might work for you Belle, but it’s not how I work” “Ten minutes ago you were in my bed doing things to me that you would never dream of doing to her so don’t you even think about implying that I’m the guilty one here! She’s your wife not mine!” “I won’t do this to her” “You already have! Do you really think the fact that she doesn’t know about this makes this any better?...Tell her...please just tell her” “I can’t” he whispered regretfully. “I won’t” “Please” she pleaded, exposed and begging but not caring how it looked if it meant he would do what she wanted. “I know you hate her Belle but I didn’t think even you could be that cruel” “I don’t hate her. I don’t like her but I don’t hate her. And if I thought for one minute that you were happy with her and that you, her, Ollie and Jamie were this amazing little family unit then I swear I would bite all this back and hurt alone. But you’re not happy, you wouldn’t be here if you were. And your supposed family is just one big sham that’s eventually going to fall apart at the seams whether I’m the catalyst for that or not and that is not the best thing for Jamie” “How would you know what’s best for him Belle? You barely know him!” he snapped venomously. “Don’t play that card Aden, I don’t believe you would ever sink that low! “You’ve been around a few weeks Belle, how could you know what’s best for him? Lots of kids have parents who aren’t together anymore” he replied, his tone calmer and more rational. “That’s true. But they tend to hate each other and being apart is probably the best for their kids considering. But Jamie’s missing out on being with his Mummy and his Daddy, who love each other and him so much that it hurts not to be a family. How can that be the best for him?” “He’s happy and all this...this mess would just confuse the hell out of him and I won’t do that to him” “I want to be his mother Aden and the only way I can really do that is if we’re a family...a proper family” she whispered, a single tear beginning to trail down her cheek. “So that’s what this is all about. You don’t want me at all, you just want to get closer to Jamie” “You know that’s not true. I want you...both of you. I want to be his mother and I want to be your...” “My what Belle?” he looked at her expectantly, eyebrows arched. “Everything” she whispered. “I want to be your everything” “Stop it” he whispered back. “I’m married” he announced once again, appearing to be reminding himself as much as he was her. “I know and I hate that. And I’m sorry that for me to get what I want Kirsty will have to get hurt but I am not sorry for loving you Aden. I won’t apologise for that. Or for loving our son. Our perfect son. No matter what happens Aden someone is going to get hurt but if you stay with her then they’ll be three people hurting...me, you and Jamie” “You know I would never do anything if I thought for one minute it would hurt him Belle. He’s my entire world!” “Then leave her!” she snapped. “I can’t!” “You know Aden I had you down as a lot of things but a spineless coward was not one of them!” she bellowed as an annoyed voice interrupted. “What the hell is going on?” “Drew” she gulped in shock. “What are you doing here?” “I think the question is what is he doing here?” Drew replied, his eyes scanning the scene before him as he looked at Aden in disdain. Belle tugged at the hem of the suddenly too short robe in an attempt to preserve her modesty. “I don’t know” she shrugged turning to face her former husband. “What are you doing her Aden?” He didn’t respond as he eyed Drew suspiciously. “I get it” he nodded. “You’re sleeping with him now, he’s only been back 5 minutes!” “No, Aden I am not but even if I was you wouldn’t care would you because you’re married remember?!” “And if she’s sleeping with me at least she’s moved back up the food chain from you” Drew commented snidely. “I am not sleeping with him!” Belle told him adamantly as Drew received a sharp clip around the head. “Then what’s he doing here if this isn’t some sort of...” “Aden who cares what he’s doing here? I couldn’t care less!” “Hey!” Drew exclaimed as Belle ignored him and stepped so close to Aden that her hair tickled his soft skin. “Tell her” she whispered. “Tell her or get out and don’t ever think about coming back” “Belle” he half pleaded. “I mean it Aden, I’m tired of playing games so this is it. All or nothing...so what will it be?” He gulped, his eyes scanning her face and realising she was completely serious. His eyes fluttered to where Drew stood watching intently before making their way back to Belle. He released a long, deep sigh and silently walked away. She buried her head in her hands as gentle sobs shook her aching body. “Belle?” Drew asked hesitantly. “What are you doing here idiot?” she snapped. “Well I’m going back to the City tomorrow and I thought well...we haven’t really had chance to spend any time together just me and you and I know you’re always up late so I brought midnight snacks. I didn’t realise you wouldn’t be alone. I’ll just go” “No Drew wait!” she called after him. “By any chance do you have Ben & Jerry’s in there?” she smiled slightly nodding towards the bag of goodies he was carrying. “Of course, cookie dough your favourite” “Then you better dig out the spoons” she smiled before disappearing into her room to put some clothes on. When she returned she found him curled up on the sofa already digging into the ice cream. “Hey! You started without me!” she scolded him, plunging her spoon into the tub before leaning her head on his shoulder and taking a mouthful of ice cream. “So” he looked at her expectantly. “Do you want to talk about what happened?” Belle shrugged against his arm. “We slept together and now he’s gone back home to get in bed with his wife whilst our son sleeps next door in what is technically my house. And I’m the guilty one, the Scarlett woman, that’s how it all works . Other than that there’s nothing to tell” “Belle, I thought you just wanted to be part of the kid’s life, I thought you were over that loser” “The kid is called Jamie thank you very much Drew! That’s my son you’re talking about! And I do want to be part of his life but I want to be part of Aden’s too. I know you don’t like him but I love him” “He’s not good enough for you” he told her, his tone full of sincerity. “And who is Drew, you?” “God no, I’m way too good for you Taylor!” he grinned and she chuckled loudly before her expression became serious once more. “He is good enough Drew, more than good enough but it doesn’t matter anymore because what you just witnessed... that was the end” “Really?” Drew looked at her doubtfully. “I’m not going to sit around and wait for him for finally get a clue. He’s married and she’s welcome to him” “Good for you” Drew smiled genuinely. “Then why doesn’t it feel good?” she sighed. “Because you haven’t eaten your own weight in ice cream yet” he laughed. “Eugh do not let me do that again, I was sick last time” “I know, I was the one holding your hair back remember?” “Erm no that was Matilda, you were the one laughing at me!” “That’s not how I remember it!” he grinned. “Oh no of course it wouldn’t be” she laughed back. “Seriously Taylor” he suddenly changed the topic in sombre tone. “I don’t want to get all mushy on you here and I will deny ever saying if you dare to repeat it outside this room but this but that kid, Jamie” he corrected himself as she raised her eyebrows sternly at him. “He doesn’t know how lucky he is to have you for a mother” “No he doesn’t” she shook her head sadly. “But he will do, I promise”
LAURZY! Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 I knew it was too good to be true!! I dont see why he cant leave Kirsty, he doens't love her!!! Loved Drew, especially what he said in the end Really well written!! absolutely loved it Cant wait to read more
leah1234 Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 aaw i know one of them was going to think it was a mistake i loved the talk between belle and drew, it was really sweet!!!! i can't wait to see how this plays out update soon xxxxxxxxx
wrongturntaken Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 Wow! Once again and incredible chapter!!!! You write their dialogue so realistically!!!!! Loved every second! Aden should definitely break up with Kirsty, he was cheating emotionally, and he's just cheated physically. It's too late for him to do the noble thing now! I thought he was a bit of a jerk to Belle really, not that i approve of him cheating but still... His reactions were perfect though! Seriously you're writing is awesome!!! I loved the bit with Drew too!!!! Udate soon!
HAA Girl 08 Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 I knew it was too good to be true!! I dont see why he cant leave Kirsty, he doens't love her!!! Loved Drew, especially what he said in the end Really well written!! absolutely loved it Cant wait to read more ^ I agree. He needs to leave Kirsty NOW and start up a family with Belle and Jamie. Really well written, Louise! Cannot wait for more
Taniya_K Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 You couldn't even give them more than two lines of being happy in this chapter Another beautiful, painstaking chapter. I don't understand how he could walk away from Belle. Everything she said was true... Loved Drew and Belle in this. Toooo good! It made the chapter better for me! Cannot wait for more. I hope Aden confesses to Kirsty. xoxo
xknomex Posted January 28, 2009 Report Posted January 28, 2009 *tear* that brought me to tears!!! :( you wrote that so amazingly well!!! WOW! please make it better, cant kirsty just.... I dont know. go back to kane?... something? Brilliant update xxx
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