dee83 Posted April 25, 2008 Report Posted April 25, 2008 can`t wait till he dumps Lisa shes really getting on my nerves update soon its grt
valli Posted April 27, 2008 Report Posted April 27, 2008 Argh, I always read the chapter, but forget to comment. Bad HM! Anyway, another great chapter! This is getting really exciting! Will Lisa catch them together? I have a really strong dislike for Lisa >_< She's in the way, and she put her hand in Jack's trousers That area is for Martha only! And again I had a favourite part: “Yeah” he laughed nervously, “sounds like a plan”, he said as he ran his hands up and down her back. “But, don’t you want to go and explore first” he continued with slight hesitancy; it was the best excuse he could think of. Her eyes abruptly lit open at his comment. “Mhm, exploring sounds like fun” she smirked in a husky voice as she kissed him passionately on the lips. Again Lisa stands for the entertaining. She's so silly and naive sometimes that it's hilarious, and she takes things the wrong way More please!
Zetti Posted April 28, 2008 Report Posted April 28, 2008 Sorry its taken me so long to comment! Loved the chapter Poor Martha though
vale4eva Posted April 29, 2008 Report Posted April 29, 2008 Thanks peeps! Warning: Chapter not suitable for younger readers! Enjoy Chapter 30: (11pm – The eve of Jacks birthday) Jack lay on the bed with Lisa snuggled up beside him; her hands clutched around his arm and waist as she held onto him so closely. Finally he could rest his tired mind… He had just spent the last hour, making up excuses as to why he couldn’t have sex with her. Lisa had silently prayed to sleep with him on the eve of his birthday, as Jack was well aware of, but unfortunately for her, he had other things in mind. Martha mostly, and was secretly determined that his relationship with Lisa would go no further than this. “How are you feeling baby” Lisa cooed at him as she gently rubbed his stomach. “Oh, I’m alright, I feel better now I’m lying down” he lied. The truth was, he felt absolutely fine, but the best excuse he could come up with was … “I’m too ill to do anything, I must have food poisoning or something” he winged; putting on his adorable pouting face as his beautiful brown eyes opened wide … That was his sad face; he could always make the girls feel sorry for him when he put that one on! *Ring* *Ring* “That’s weird, who’d be calling us at this time of night” she thought out loud as she pulled herself away from Jack and answered the phone… “Hello … Oh Martha hey … what’s up? … Oh, you’re kidding … well Jacks not feeling so good right now so …” Jacks ears pricked up at the mention of Martha’s name. Shuffling into a seated position, he waited for Lisa to finish. “Ok … I’ll see what I can do … goodnight”. Placing the phone down onto the receiver, she turned to Jack, “that was Martha; she said she’s not feeling so good and wants you to go around” she told him, “I guess she must have what you have”. He nodded slowly; his face frowning as he thought for a moment. Martha was fine before he had left her, so how could she suddenly be sick? Something suspicious was going on here. “Oh right” he replied, a hint of unease in his voice as he spoke, “Well, I guess I should go and sit with her then” he said as he pushed himself off the bed. “Wait a second, you can’t go anywhere in your condition” she objected as she kneeled on the mattress; tugging at his arm. “It’s ok, really. I’d prefer to know that she’s alright”. She smiled at him through adoration, “You are the sweetest brother ever; you really do adore her don’t you,” she said as she moved forward, wrapping her arms around his neck. He released a nervous smile as he cautiously nodded. “Well I hope she knows how lucky she is, having a brother like you”. He swallowed hard; “I’m sure she does” he replied; his voice turning into a whisper. Angling his head towards her, he kissed her softly on the lips. Pulling away he grabbed his door key, before turning and walking towards the door, “Get some sleep yeah, I’ll be back as soon as I can”. “Ok, goodnight” she smiled, before lying downwards and snuggling back inside the quilt covers. …………………………… (11.10pm) Much to Martha’s relief, a gentle tap on the door could soon be heard. Tiptoeing across the cold floor, she opened the door to be presented with the welcome sight of Jacks beautiful face. “Hey you” he said with so much care, as his face lit up in a small smile. He soon frowned however, as he studied her distant expression… Unable to hold it in any longer, her emotions took hold; the tears pouring out as she flung her arms around him. Stepping backwards and steadying his feet, he took her into his arms, “Hey … its ok” he soothed her with a tender voice, “… its all going to be ok…” Lifting her up, she wrapped her legs around his waist, as he led them over towards the bed … ………………………… “So … Do you want to tell me what’s on your mind?” he asked softly as he gently stroked her forehead, running his fingers downwards and into her long brown hair. They were now sitting on the bed. Jack with his back resting against the headboard, and Martha sat in his lap, her head tucked safely in his chest. “You’ll just think I’m being stupid” she sniffled away her tears. “I won’t, I promise,” he spoke softly to reassure her. “Just tell me what you’re thinking…” She released an exhausted sigh, “It’s just … being alone in here, everything keeps going around in my head … just the thought of what they’ll all think and say … will they abandon us and throw us out” she thought aloud, “or will they just accept that we’re in love and try and deal with it” she continued, “somehow I doubt it’ll be the latter”, her face fell in sadness, “and its not just that …” she paused slightly, the tears building up and spilling over her eyes as she sobbed, “I so badly wanted to be the first person to be with you on your birthday … instead I’m stuck in here, and you’re in there with Lisa” she sniveled, her lip quivering as she spoke, “…and I know its my own fault but … it just hurts so much” she cried. He placed a kiss on her cheek as he gently rocked her in his arms; his heart breaking at how much this was destroying her. Calming down, she rubbed at her tired and watery eyes. “I know there are loads more birthdays to come, but you’re turning 21, that’s like one of the major milestones”, she smiled sadly, “I just wanted to be the first person to see you when it happened … I know it sound’s stupid, but…” “No, it doesn’t sound stupid, it’s really sweet”. She smiled through her tears as she looked into his loving eyes, “Will you stay with me for a bit?” He nodded slowly, his arms holding onto her tightly, “Of course I will”. “Thank you” she said softly; pulling him closer and wrapping her arms around him. Lying backwards they sunk into the bed, keeping each other close. Tilting her head, she looked into his eyes; her helpless face begging for him to take away her pain… “Try not to think about it” he hushed across to her as he lightly stroked her cheek. Her watery eyes fell heavy at his touch, as she softly whispered back; “take my mind off it Jack” she gently pleaded with him. “Please”. Unable to stand her sadness, he did as she asked; leaning forward and tenderly kissing her on the lips… …………………………………… The clock ticked 2 minutes past 12. And Martha still lay wrapped up in Jacks warm and loving arms. “Hey, look at that” he whispered down to her from out of the silence. “What?” she replied, as she peeled herself away from his chest and sat up to face him. “The time ... It’s after 12, which means I’m officially 21” he smiled. Her face lit up as she glanced over towards the clock, “oh yeah” she smiled shyly; overjoyed that she had been granted her wish. Leaning forward she embraced him in a tight hug. Her warmth and love filled Jacks heart completely. He was overwhelmed by how much this meant to her. Feeling her place a kiss on his cheek, he made out her mumble … “I love you Jack”. He smiled through contentment as he held onto her, his eyes gradually closing shut as he treasured the magical moment, in which the whole world drifted away, and left only them … Preview: Its Jacks birthday and Martha's emotions are all over the place Someone finds themselves in a sticky situation ... And following a dramatic turn of events, why is everyone so shocked? Is Jack some kind of superhero?
Tasha Posted April 29, 2008 Report Posted April 29, 2008 awww...that was so short, but so cute <33 Martha is such a sweetie And Jack, well i love him no matter what, well unless he breaks Marthas heart, but that'll never happen, i hope Great chapter More please
Barbara Posted April 29, 2008 Report Posted April 29, 2008 It wasn't Lisa's tears but Martha's. Fortunately, it wasn't because Jack broke her heart. Awww Martha wanted to be the 1st one to be with him for his birthday. Glad her wish came true! Loved the JM moments. How sweet! Jack came up with an excuse not to have sex with Lisa and she fell for it. She's so naive. Does she really have to keep on saying he's the sweetest brother? The preview sounds interesting. Can't wait to read the next chapter! More please.
bay girl Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 I hate Lisa. I hate her more and more every time i read another a chapter. lol. Lets just have Lisa find out all ready. All the dancing around sucks. More please.
kaciexox Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 Lisa. Needs. To. Die. Ok maybe not die but at least go away, I really don't like her Aw poor Martha This must be hard for her By lucky she has Jack Update soon
jack+martha=trooluvv Posted April 30, 2008 Report Posted April 30, 2008 I love the JM scenes I'm glad that it's moved on from lusty old lust to true love, now all we need is for Lisa to be swept off her feet by some random dude (Aden, perchance? They'd suit each other ) and she can go away and Jack and Martha can be together without any guilt. But what about when Tony finds out? That's got to happen
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